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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What is the reasons for this problem? What are the effect on the society?

#students #science #subjects #university #countries #effect #society
In several
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 of
world
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 , the number of
students
 choosing
science
 in universities
are
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 not sufficient. There are some causes and effects described on the society described in upcoming paragraphs as disinterest of
students
 and the human resource crisis.
First
 off, there are several reasons that
affects
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 the decrease in
number
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 of
students
 studying
science
 like difficulties during
study
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the study
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 and spending a lot of time which makes it less amusing. It is irrefutable fact, that
science
 is a complicated subject,
hence
 it requires hard work and patience.
Consequently
,
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learners
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leaners
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learners
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 have to spend a lot of time
to study
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 without having
a
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leisure time.
This
 activity would suit
to
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students
 who would like to dive into
science
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the science
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. The shortage of
students
 involved in
science
 has
adverse
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 influence on the current and future society. The dropping numbers of future scientists leads to the lack of future specialists in
this
 area.
Consequently
,
the
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society will face
with
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problems as
imbalance
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.
For instance
, if a lot of people who do
discovering
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 or explore the
science
 will go down. To conclude, I suppose that the shortage of people studying
science
 subjects due to insufficiency of the lack of interest in subjects would have
a
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big consequences as the lack of human capitals in some areas.
Hence
, it would be a big problem if the number of scientists will continue to drop.
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