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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

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In several parts of the world,
science
 is being ignored by juniors. The problem of ignorance of
science
subjects
 as a major subject by adolescence could have an effect on society.
This
 essay will discuss possible reasons for
this
 problem and the effect on society.
Firstly
,
science
subjects
 are a difficult area to choose main
subjects
, students who choose
science
subjects
 to need to put some extra effort to cope up with studies. So the main reason why undergraduates ignoring
science
subjects
 can be extra effort and stress. The survey conducted in 2011 by the UK chartered of education suggests that the main reason why teenagers not enough choose
science
subjects
 is stress. Adolescence prefers stress-free
subjects
 like business management and art.
Secondly
, the attraction of scholars towards other
subjects
instead
 of
science
 would create a shortage in specialists field. There would fewer people in the field of
science
. It leads to a lack of unemployment,
also
 it brings to economical problems, the number of scientists will reduce and the number of other specialists will increase so it brings to unemployment. To conclude, one of the main reasons for ignoring
science
 by graduates is the demand for
this
 field and the stress factors,
also
 it will affect the society and economy of the country.
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