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There is an idea that raising governmental taxes on junk
food
, which is the main reason for different illnesses may decrease the number of people who have a
health
 problem. Personally, I do not totally agree, because supposed action may lead to economic issues in states.
To begin
with
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 the given suggestion which indeed could improve the physical state of a population. Today a lot of people prefer to eat fast
food
 which is harmful
for
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 their
health
.
For example
, approximately 45% of American citizens have obesity because of frequent eating of junk
food
.
Thus
,
growth
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 of taxes on
a
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harmful meal in countries, as the USA possibly make the situation better. In spite of
such
 action can have a positive impact on the
health
 of the population, there are could be several negative effects.
First
 of all, if humans do not stop eating and buy fast
food
, they will have to increase their living expectancy and it can make a worse financial situation in society.
In addition
, some people probably do not understand
this
 measure, why government raise the price on their favourite and cheap meal. ,
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 it can cause social demonstrations. So, the raising of taxes can be dangerous. In conclusion, the authority of some countries may try to improve the
health
 of the population in their states by escalating prices on fast
food
,
,
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however
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 we should not forget about possible consequences
such
 as the falling level of the economy and social protests.
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