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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Many people think that individual contributors and department stores have the responsibility to reduce the
amount
 of packaging of products, while others think that the buyers should avoid buying products with a lot of packaging. It is indisputable that
plastic
 packaging of
goods
 is the main
wastes
 nowadays and it is produced by the
manufacturers
; thereby, they should
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 to
this
 problem.
However
, the customers should concern about
this
 issue as well. According to
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recent research, the packaging of
goods
 is provided by
manufacturers
 and supermarket. No one can deny that almost 100
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 of
goods
 are covered by packaging and it
increase
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 enormous
wastes
 in our society especially
plastic
 packaging.
Therefore
, many people think that
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companies should
response
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 to
this
 problem.
For example
, invent the packaging of
goods
 that decomposed by
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such
 as papers
instead
 of plastics or renewable materials to reduce
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 of
wastes
.
On the other hand
, some people think that the customers should avoid buying
goods
 that
contains
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 many packaging to reduce
plastic
wastes
.
For instance
, the company that
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the
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products with
plastic
 packaging are banned by the buyers can cause
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pressure
to
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 the
manufacturers
 and it can encourage them to create
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friendly environmental packaging to draw the attention
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 the customer again. In conclusion, I believe that both
of
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manufacturers
 and customers should
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in
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this
 problem. The
amount
 of packaging is produced by the need of them.
Hence
, they should maintain and reduce the
amount
 of waste packaging to make
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 better society in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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