Some people think that government should spend money on railways. Other believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Commuting is one of the basic needs in today's world, where subway and roads are equally being used by passengers. There is a school of thought that, railway deserves more consideration of government than roads, at the same time some array of masses think that more money should be spent on roads. I will give my opinion in
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both perspectives. Admittedly, railways are congenial to travel for
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itineraries, as it consumes less time than going by road.
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governments must make it more comfortable and affordable to commute by trains.To instantiate,
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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