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Students in school should learn academic subjects and pass exams .Other skills such as cookeryidressmaking and woodwork can be learnt well from family and friends.Do you agree or disagree=?

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İt is commonly stated that university teaches only academic subjects because the vocation-oriented job can be learnt outside of school.I disagree with the given statement ,which ı intend to support my views with my arguments.
To begin
 with ,it is the duty of schools to integrate people into society and to ensure their development.Everyone may not be able to have a capability of learning academic subjects,
such
 as science and mathematics,and these people should be directed other
skills
 ,
such
 as cookery,dressmaking and woodwork,by schools.By doing so,the awareness of students on other
skills
 develop.As long as
this
 current increases day by day , it is highly possible to witness a growing up in the number of people who know what they want to do after graduation because they have all the technical knowledge on their job. Another important point is that a state-of-the-art company place a Premium on practical experience rather than theoretical education when they staff for their corporation.
Therefore
, having practical experience as well as a degree enable graduates to find a job easily.Take a student who graduated from a vocation-oriented school as an example; having not only some technique but
also
 theoretical knowledge about her field will give her a head start over others because recruiters are more likely to hire an applicant with relevant both information rather than one with an only academic degree. To summarize in the light of the information given above ,ı confidently believe that the vocation-oriented
skills
 should be given as a lesson in the schools and ı think that it can make the development of students on other
skills
 rise in the future.
Submitted by Ahmet Münir KOCAMAN on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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