Many people work longer hours, leaving little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

Some people argue that
space
exploration
has had more to do with national pride than international effort. How do you think
space
exploration
will change in the future? From
an
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space
exploration
has been one of the dreams of
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population. After
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World
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countries
established
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space
exploration
centers
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. In my
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it is the term of
international
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effort
,
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because in
this
situation
countries
have to collaborate and share the risks, opportunities of
such
explorations.
Firstly
, the
countries
which are engaged in
space
exploration
learn a lot from each other during their collaboration.
For instance
, there is a commitment between Russia and China to help each other for improving the results in
this
sphere. The scholar who
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worked in these explorations have to forget about their pride and concentrate
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international effort.
Secondly
, after
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came
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The Cold War which was between
Soviet
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Union and
USA
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. These
countries
try to outfly each other in
Space
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. The
first
spacecraft was launched by
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Union which shocked all media organizations of the
world
as well as
population
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. It was
dramatically
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important change in the
Space
Exploration
Industry of the
world
.
Thirdly
, nowadays several
countries
are independently established their own
Space
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Centers. They try to attract
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number of scholars for
exploration
instead
of high wages. But in the vast majority of
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it is a term of national pride,
hence
it is hard to attract
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of scholars from these
countries
. In conclusion,
although
the vast majority of the
countries
which are engaged in
space
exploration
established their industry independently, they have to cooperate, collaborate with other nations for evolving their industry.
Otherwise
, it is impossible to follow the new trends and tendencies of
World
Space
Exploration
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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