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in many places people think countryside land should not be utilized for building new homes. it is important to save countryside beauty.

#places #people #countryside #land #homes #beauty
In
this
 modern times
construction
 works have to face many challenges from traffic jams to climate change, so it is important to evaluate things before going for possible
construction
 that would
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effect
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affect
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 the area and geography.
government
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the government
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 often plan to build homes in the
countryside
 to avoid traffic jams, accidents and over-crowded streets. there are plenty of benefits from
this
 kind of approach as it is
only
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the only
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 place available for
construction
 purposes. with the increase in population new
houses
 are required to serve
people
 across the country. some
people
 are against
this
 approach to use
countryside
 land for building
houses
 and
another
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other
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construction
 projects because it is considered
beauty
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the beauty
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 of
country
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the country
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 and
people
 are attached to its clean and green environment. it is important to consider
people
 view on the
construction
 of building new
houses
 because it
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effects
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 the local population. its the duty of
government
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the government
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 to use barren land which is not suitable for any type of vegetation for new home
construction
 projects. and avoid any unnecessary changes in the
countryside
. New
houses
 should be built as per the requirement but
also
 keeping in to protect
countryside
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the countryside
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 from any possible threat to its beauty as well as climate change of the area.
this
 can be done by
green
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the green
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 energy approach which is new and reliable for future years to have
population
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a population
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 free environment without increasing
temperature
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the temperature
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 of
earth
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the earth
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. it will allow us to save melting glaciers and maintain
balance
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the balance
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 of greenhouse gases under check which was the prominent reason behind
extinction
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the extinction
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 of many animals and birds species. government should address all the issues wisely and provide reliable and conducive method to solve the problem in
a
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 efficient way.
countryside
 beauty should be preserved at any cost and it is in the
nation
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national
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 interest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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