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every year several languages dies out,some people think that this is not important because ;life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world . to what extend do you agree or disagree

#year #languages #people #life #world
There is an assumption that there are
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 of endangered languages today, at the same time some array of masses question
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significance as they find
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 number of lingos to be more convenient. I firmly oppose
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 thoughts in
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culture is not alive when
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 language is deceased. Admittedly,
world
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 today is becoming a small village and English has proven
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 worth in every corner of the world, but language plays an essential role to distinguish societies and nations and every single of them needs to be preserved well for
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. To instantiate, India is
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 of cultures and languages, where 22 official mother tongues are being spoken by the natives. One of the tongue Punjabi has been considered to be at risk of loss when it was stopped to be taught in schools. People
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 are getting attracted to learn new lexical resources for different purposes. To exemplify, study abroad, learn
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 of different countries and for widespread interests only. Propelling
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, it has been demonstrated very well that language is necessary for accounting
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 lost details of historical elements.
For instance
, the history of pyramids is justified by the texts used on the carvings on the tombs of the officials.
Also
, in
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 if well preserved these can assure linguistic diversity for coming generations.
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, It must be a vulnerable cultural heritage for
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. To
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 up, it depends upon individual values if they would like to protect their mother tongue for
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. It is going to
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 as much as it is going to be used.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Language extinction
  • Communication barrier
  • Linguistic imperialism
  • Endangered languages
  • Language revitalization
  • Monolingual
  • Multilingual
  • Language preservation
  • Homogenization
  • Language policy
  • Cultural assimilation
  • Intangible heritage
  • Indigenous languages
  • Globalization
  • Dialects
  • Localization
  • Language documentation
  • Digital archiving
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