Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre, is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Government
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

investment
are
Change the verb form
is

The plural verb are does not appear to agree with the singular subject Government investment. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

show examples
useful for different sector of society for development and to
icrease
Correct your spelling
increase

The word icrease is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

standard of living.investments are usually utilized on public sector
undertaking
Correct your spelling
undertakings

The word undertaking doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

show examples
such
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

as banks and
infrastructure related
Add a hyphen
infrastructure-related

It appears that infrastructure related is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

show examples
projects.
government
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

should prioritize public in
spendind
Correct your spelling
spending

The word spendind is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

rather than on arts and music.
thus
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

it will benefit customers and save their precious time. we will try to address all those issues regarding
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

disaggrement
Correct your spelling
disagreement

The word disaggrement is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

on investment spendings. unarguably, it is the
government
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

duty to protect
rights
Correct article usage
the rights

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
of
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

by providing easy efficient and quick
services
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

hassle free
Add a hyphen
hassle-free

It appears that hassle free is missing a hyphen. Consider adding the hyphen(s).

show examples
. spending should be more on building roads, construction of dams, solar energy and clean water.
government
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

jobs are the most prefered one in
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

time of
privitisation
Correct your spelling
privatisation

The word privitisation is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

and it is considered as
a
Remove the article
apply

The indefinite article, a, may be redundant when used with the uncountable noun security in your sentence. Consider removing it.

show examples
job security. money should
be spend
Change the verb form
be spent

It appears that the form of the verb spend does not work with be in this sentence.

show examples
on health care issue which is
huge
Add an article
a huge

The noun phrase huge challenge seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
challenge in today life. many
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

believe to spend more on public
sevicse
Correct your spelling
service
services

The word sevicse is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

rather than on drama and theatre projects is
unwise
Correct article usage
an unwise

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
approach
Add the particle
to approach

It appears that the verb approach should be in the to-infinitive form. Consider adding the word to.

show examples
and in a sense neglecting. all the institution play
important
Add an article
an important

The noun phrase important part seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
part in
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
society and
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

spend money on watch movie listening to music contribute to
government
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

tax collection.
an
Change the article
a

The article an may be incorrect. Consider changing it to agree with the beginning sound of the following word collective.

show examples
collective
approachj
Correct your spelling
approach

The word approachj is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

required to ensure
survival
Add an article
the survival

The noun phrase survival seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
of those spending their time in arts and cinema to entertain
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. more emphasis on public
services
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

increase
Change the verb form
increases

The plural verb increase does not appear to agree with the singular subject emphasis. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

show examples
gap
Add an article
the gap

The noun phrase gap seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
between the two different
section
Change to a plural noun
sections

The singular noun section follows a number other than one. Consider changing the noun to the plural form.

show examples
resulting in a conflict or crisis.
for
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

instance
Add a comma
,instance

It appears that you are missing a comma after the introductory phrase for instance. Consider adding a comma.

show examples
if
government
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

banks pump more money in the economy it will
increase
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

purchasing
Add an article
the purchasing

The noun phrase purchasing power seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
power of
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and spending on shopping, cinema, music is inevitable. in
this
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

scenario both the section will benefit equally.
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

increase
Correct article usage
An increase

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
in demand will allow
service
Add an article
the service
a service

The noun phrase service provider seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
provider to secure more loans
fron
Correct your spelling
from

The word fron is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

Correct your spelling
government
goverment
Correct article usage
the goverment

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
to
increase
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

their capacity. it is to be concluded that both
the
Correct article usage
apply

It seems that article use may be incorrect here.

show examples
sections require equal attention from
Use synonyms
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

government
Add an article
the government

The noun phrase government seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
. public
services
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

should be
priortized
Correct your spelling
prioritized

The word priortized is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

for excellent health
services
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

and infrastructure because these two are the backbone of society. all the details make
impession
Correct your spelling
impression

The word impession is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

to be
ebsure
Correct your spelling
sure
ensure

The word ebsure is not in our dictionary. If you’re sure this spelling is correct, you can add it to your personal dictionary to prevent future alerts.

public spending to uplift
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

to cope up with arising challenges like covid19. it is in the interest of
people
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

as well in
interest
Add an article
the interest

The noun phrase interest seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
of
country
Add an article
the country

The noun phrase country seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

show examples
.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: