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One of the most important issues facing the world today is a shortage of food and some think genetically modified foods are a possible solution. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Lack of
food
 is the major problem nowadays.People are surviving due to
shortage
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a shortage
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 of
food
 because in some cities and town
food
 is not adequate to provide properly.A school of thought that one of the most significant raises facing the globe in these days is a scarcity of
food
,whereas other contends that genetically foods resources are a feasible measure.I completely accord
this
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 statement and
reasons
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the reasons
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 for my opinion will be elucidated in the forthcoming paragraphs. To
conspicuous
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 there are numerous reasons for why genetically
food
 is better for providing
cusines
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cuisine
business
 over the world,where individuals could get the
delicacious
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delicious
delicacies
 easily.It means
food
 produces
by
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in
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the
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a
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 biotechnical way,
it
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apply
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 will
safe
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save
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the
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apply
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water and more wastage of the resources.
For example
,a few years ago in
africa
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Africa
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 there always inadequate
of
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apply
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food
 and humans can not get
tye
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the
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food
 easily which belongs to underprivileged
starta
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strata
 of society.In 2018
there
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their
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 government had decided that they will generate the genetic
food
 with
top level
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top-level
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 testing biotechnology techniques,
that
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which
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 actually works and now they can produce adequate
food
 in their nation.
To
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In
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 addition
it
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, there is one more reason that with the help of genetic
food
 people can eat more nutrients and protein,which
doesnot
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does not
doesn't
 get from the natural resources.
Moreover
,individuals can fit healthy and stay strong to consume
the
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apply
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genetically
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genetical
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food
.To exemplify,modified apple has
rich
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a rich
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 amount of vitamin B,while the actual apple does not have
this
 type of vitamin. To conclude,
world
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the world
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 facing many problems to overcoming the foods but the solutions are to produce more
food
 from the
genetic
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genetically
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 modified foods which save
the
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apply
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water and
food
,which is used for taking care of living things.
Also
,it supplies
to
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people with the foremost nutrients that increase their well-being
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