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The best way to understand other cultures is to work for a multinational organisation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued by some that working for a multinational company is the best way to learn about other
cultures
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 essay completely agrees with that statement, mainly due to the working relationships with
people
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 from all over the world and the need to sell different items in different countries.
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 and foremost, working with
people
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 from other countries helps to understand their culture better. A steady interaction with individuals from a variety of places around the world can introduce an individual to numerous
holydays
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holidays
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 and
cultures
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 he did not know were exist before.
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, a salesperson from
india
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India
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 must learn the rituals of
christmass
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Christmas
 in
order
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 to be able to maximize his selling potential to
people
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 from the United States during the days around
christmass
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Christmas
.
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, a multinational organization often needs to produce different
itmes
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items
times
 for various
countires
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countries
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 is because the demand in each country for the same products
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my
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 differ in regard to its culture.
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, as an employee for a large multinational company, one has to be
famillier
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familiar
 with many different
cultures
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 in
order
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 to
adujst
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adjust
 the items that his
compamy
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company
 sells to a particular culture in various country.
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, a European individual working for a
colthing
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clothing
 company must know the dressing habits of
people
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 in South America in
order
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 to sell the company’s clothes in that continent. In conclusion, I strongly believe that workers for multinational organizations have a better chance of understanding other
cultures
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, mainly because
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 interaction with employees from other states and the need to know other
cultures
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 in
order
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 to be able to sell their products efficiently.
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