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Today more people are buying food instead of cooking it themselves. What in your opinion are its advantages and disadvantages?

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Nowadays with globalisation and round the clock working
hours
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 people struggle to find
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 for themselves. In
this
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time
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, buying
food
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 has become the preference of many rather than cooking
food
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 at
home
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. I believe cooking
food
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 is healthier than buying packaged
food
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.
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, in the given work culture many
struggle
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 to find to even do their routine tasks. In today's era of global connectivity cooking
food
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 at
home
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 has taken a backseat. Though cooking
food
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 at
home
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 is cheaper and healthier. For centuries cooking
food
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 at
home
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 has kept families together as the act is considered to be of utmost caregiving. It
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 adds gratitude
in
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 people. But with chaotic working hours and stressful lifestyle, buying ready to eat
food
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 is easy. In some
cases
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 it is
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 considered as a status symbol to go out every weekend for dinner or lunch with friends or family. Buying
food
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 is now only a matter of clicking on a few buttons on one's device
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 adding the notion that one can use the same
time
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 in relaxing and an excuse to fend off the task of cooking. The comparison between the health of people who consume more junk
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 vs those who eat
home
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-cooked
food
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 has become part of many scientific
researches
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 in the past decade.
Time
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 again it has been proved through these studies that 'you are what you eat.'
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, I firmly believe that cooking
food
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 ourselves is much more advantageous than buying
food
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