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some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. but others believe the that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are good at or they find the most interest. Discuss both the sides and give your opinions

#people #teenagers #school #subjects #focus #interest
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In the contemporary epoch, there are
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enormous
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 of new subjects introduced in
school
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the school
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 curriculum.Fewer have an opinion that
school goers
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 should
focus
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 in all
subject
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inspite
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in spite
 of their preference.
on the other
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hand
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 some argue young adults should
focus
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 on
the
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their favourite
subject
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.
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,
i
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 strongly believe that the students should follow the
subject
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 they are capable
in
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of
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.
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 essay would analyse both the phenomenon and come to a conclusion.
firstly
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 , getting the knowledge of all subjects is
boredom
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 and
time consuming
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 process.
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further
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 when a pupil
start
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 to gather knowledge of all the syllabus
in depth
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 they can not specialise in all the subjects .
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 , due to lack of
interest
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 they might end up in lack in
focus
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toward
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on
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 studies. To cite an example, a survey was done among students at schools in
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.
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accordind
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according
 to the survey the students excelled well in
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subject
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a subject
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 which they are good ,
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hand
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 the pupils who focused all were not good in their studies.
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, the attention toward the
subject
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 they are good in leads to specialisation and inventive.
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, the teenagers would learn
enthsiastically
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enthusiastically
 and try to invent new theories or inventions on their favourite
subject
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 area.
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, in most of the nations globally from the initial stage of their ages gives options to the field of
area
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the area
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 they intend to follow.
therefore
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this
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 change has been welcomed by many experts that they appreciate the teens could gain expert knowledge in the
subject
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 they prefer. To conclude , each
subject
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 has its own nuances ,
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however
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 studying all courses lacks the
focus
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 and
time consuming
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. I strongly believe that a person can be
expert
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an expert
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 if only the
center
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centre
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 point of interest should be their preference.
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, the school management
also
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 could set the syllabus according to the requirement of the teens.
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