Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on the society?

Science
is one of the most important aspects of our life, but over the past years
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the quantity
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of students who want to learn
science
subjects
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intensively diminished. The main reason is a lot of pupils do not have
desire
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and enthusiasm to discover it,
also
science
is extremely difficult for many individuals.
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, not all students can afford
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in
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universities or colleges around the world.By the
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biology, chemistry, physics are the most uninteresting subjects for 75
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of
leaners
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learners
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.Approximately half of
students
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the students
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study
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subjects by force, because, they are very complicated and need
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amount of patience and power.
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reason is pupils who do not wealthy parents, cannot have
opportunity
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to be at high appreciated study buildings, except they dive into
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the science
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and win a scholarship.
This
process can lead
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exploration of Earth, so in some
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people can not find out
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of the accidents.
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they wouldn't take
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measures.
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consequence is
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of workers, for
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no one is involved in
science
, there will be a shortage of experienced medical practitioners,
this
can create imbalances in society and will be increased pressure .It would lead
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and social issues. To avoid
this
problem government divide billions of dollars to attract people, but it is not so effective.Without
science
, it becomes difficult to make the right decisions, especially on important issues. Ignorance is dangerous. In conclusion, the decline in the number of candidates choosing
science
will affect not only individuals
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but the growth of the entire country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • deter
  • promotion
  • opportunities
  • role models
  • lucrative
  • employment
  • gender stereotypes
  • societal norms
  • access to information
  • technological stagnation
  • shortage
  • skilled professionals
  • innovation
  • healthcare sector
  • workforce
  • global competitiveness
  • advancements
  • economic growth
  • public health services
  • environmental sciences
  • combat climate change
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