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In some contries, most people perfer to rent thier homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantage of renting a home?

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Nowadays, buying
of
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a
house
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 is
ever rising
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 in many countries because it is convenient in some ways.
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, there are still some drawbacks to renting a
house
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 than purchasing one.
Firstly
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, renting is more affordable than buying because it does not
pay
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 too much money.
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, population growth is putting pressure on the accommodation supply.
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 price is pushing up higher and higher
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. It follows that a
house
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 rental is an ideal option for those who can't afford to buy their property.
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, renting a
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 is suitable for people who are not ready to settle down in one place.
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, for seasonal workers who work for a different country,
rent
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 a
house
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 is the best choice for them.
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,
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while
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owning a
house
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 comes with the responsibility for the property, which
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 burden
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shoulders
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 when they rent a dwelling.
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, buying an abode is a beneficial investment today, as the
house
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 has been
rise rapid
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. But,
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rental landlords' houses, the dwellers
do
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 not
allow
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 to
rearranged
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 the
house
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 layout or set up permanent decorations
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 as driving a nail or repainting walls.
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, those who live in rental homes do not have the freedom to design their living space as they wish.
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, unlike homeowners, people who rent houses have to confront the inconvenience of living in a temporary place, including moving houses
manny
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 times and risks of losing the neighbourhood
.as
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as
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 commitment between
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landlords. In conclusion, many people have been choosing to live in rental homes because of the practical benefits.
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, renting a
house
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also
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 comes with some unavoidable disadvantages.
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