Other people think that, in today's world, subject like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In modern times, teaching a superior subject has become increasingly a controversial topic among certain demographic in our society.It is often argued that science and tech
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related
topics can play an essential role in student
life
whilst other disagree and believe that history is more important than those piece of subjects.
however
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first
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developing world , science and technology
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a vital role in people
life
.since individuals can not live a productive
life
without
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two so they are very important for us .
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is invented it's made our
life
more efficient than ever before .
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it
also
helps
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learners
to get
a high salary jobs
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because
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renowned
company
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wants
this
subject
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related
skills in them
thus
if they started to utilize
this
stuff in
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early age they will surely get benefit from it.
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this
sort of subject as more significant than others .
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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