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Although more and more people use public transport, some city streets are still overcrowded with traffic. How can this problem be solved? Provide specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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These days,
increasingly
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increasing
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 numbers of
people
 have started to
use
 public
transport
, but there is still the
problem
 of traffic jams
on
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in
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 some urban areas. As long as there are private cars, I guess the
problem
 will persist.
This
 essay will look at the ways in which the government and individuals could tackle
this
 issue. To deal with
this
problem
,
people
 should be encouraged to walk or to
use
 non-motorised means,
such
 as a bike, to move shorter distances. In turn, increasing spending on private cars should
also
 be considered.
This
 would not only minimize traffic congestion
,
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 but
also
 be beneficial to the environment. The downside of
this
 solution,
people
 with a medical condition related to their legs, would not be able to
use
 bicycles and would have to
use
 more costly modes of
transport
. An alternative solution to
this
problem
 is that the government should provide adequate, clean and safe public
transport
 services whereby more
people
 will
use
 public
transport
instead
 of taking their own private vehicles. As at the moment, there are a growing number of overcrowded buses than there are roads with
transport
.
Therefore
, if the government solves
this
problem
,
people
 will be able to get to where they need to go by public
transport
.
This
problem
 has a negative side,
people
 who are in a hurry and can't wait for the bus to get to the right station will have to
use
 private cars or taxis and overpay. In the conclusion, nowadays urban centres and towns all over the world are experiencing serious
transport
 problems. Most of
this
 is related to growing populations and inferior public
transport
. Still, some things that governments could do to solve
this
problem
 are to improve public
transport
, develop new neighbourhoods and persuade their residents to
use
 bicycles,
for example
.
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