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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effect on the society?

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These days, there are not many
students
 that want to study the major of
science
 at university in many other countries.
This
 essay will present the cause of
this
 problem and how it will affect
society
. In my opinion,
science
subjects
 are the most difficult
subjects
 for
students
 and they
are prefer
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 to choose something much easier for them. Every
science
 subject
need
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needs
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 theory and a lot of explanations to fit the concept of the lesson.
Also
, there are
heap
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 of formulas that
students
 need to understand and remember to solve the problem. Another reason is there are many interesting and fun
subjects
 out there that catch
students
' attention.
Students
 will choose
subjects
 that make them less stressful since
science
subjects
 are so stressful and complicated, they will not choose it if they have other choices.
For instance
, many interesting
subjects
such
 as art and animation have attracted many youngsters.
Besides
, these two
subjects
 will not stress them and will make them feel calmer. As the number of
students
 who join
science
subjects
 has decreased, it can have effects on the
society
 because there are not many employers for
this
subjects
 in the future and
this
 plays important role in each
society
. Every developing country needs people that employed in
this
 section and they are
also
 the part of economic growth in the
society
. In another word, Scientist can invent a lot of new technologies that can help their community and can sell overseas to make their economy higher. The lack of employment will affect
society
. In conclusion, the decrease of
students
 who interested in
science
subjects
 causes by the hardness of
subjects
 and many new
subjects
.
However
, it does have effects on
society
 because of not enough workers in
this
 industry and not many scientists that can help with the improvement of products.
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