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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather than buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantage of renting a home?

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 in many countries because it is convenient in some ways.
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, there are some deniable drawbacks of renting the abode in comparison with purchasing one.
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, renting is more affordable than buying as it does not require
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 money as provincial payments.
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, population growth is putting pressure on the accommodation supply. home price is pushing up higher and higher
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. It follows that an apartment rental is an ideal option for those who can't afford to buy their property.
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, renting a building is suitable for people who are not ready to settle down in one place.
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, seasonal workers who go for business to different
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, choose to stay in rental a lot rather than commit themselves to long-term property.
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 owning a residence comes with the responsibility for the property,
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 when they rent a dwelling.
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 , buying an abode is a beneficial investment today when demand for the dwelling is rapid.
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 homeowner has their
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 value increased over time, building tenants have to pay for their places
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 are typically getting more and more expensive.
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, most of the landlords disallow dwellers to
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 the building layout or set up permanent decorations
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 as driving a nail or repainting walls.
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, those who live in rental homes do not have full freedom to design their living space as they wish.
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 , unlike homeowners, people who rent houses have to confront the inconvenience of living in a temporary place, including moving houses
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 times and risks of losing the neighbourhood
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landlords. In conclusion, many people have been choosing to live in rental homes because of the practical benefits.
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, renting a house
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 comes with some unavoidable disadvantages.

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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