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Some People think that young people are suitable for learning a foreign language others think that older people are suitable for learning foreign language. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #language
In
this
 modern era, learning a foreign
language
 is becoming more popular and is
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 to have an extra edge as it has numerous advantages.
However
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 there are two contrasting views where a large section of
people
 deems that younger
generation
 is more capable of learning languages while others emphasize that old
people
 are more suitable to
this
 task. Apparently, various factors make a section of
people
 advocate that young
people
possesses
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 better skills for acquiring
foreign
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language
 and have many reasons to substantiate it.
First
 and foremost is the ability to grasp a new skill quickly and efficiently owing to their enthusiasm and keen interest. Another reason is that
,
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 the
brain power
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 of young
people
 is so sharp
such
 that they can remember and recollect what they learnt easily when compared to
older
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the older
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generation
.
Lastly
, young
people
 love to take challenges and try to experiment in learning new skills like learning a foreign
language
 to showcase their extra talents in the competitive world. So learning a foreign
language
 is a
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to
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younger
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the younger
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generation
.
On the other hand
, some believe that old aged
people
 are better suitable for learning
foreign
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a foreign
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language
. For myriad reasons, chiefly,
people
 aged above 40 have ample time so they can solely dedicate their time
in
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 learning a foreign
language
. As they spend more time
in
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learning they can learn quickly.
Secondly
,
people
 of
this
generation
 would not have any distractions like
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 burden or family problems. Their minds are free from all sorts of problems. They would be financially stable and can hire good tutors for home studies and nothing can beat that. All these reasons would make
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generation
 is suitable to learn a foreign
language
. In my profound opinion, I would certainly not give importance to
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 factor rather I vote for will power of a person. No matter how aged you are, to learn a foreign
language
 all you need is strong will power, dedication and zeal.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Phonetics
  • Syntax
  • Conjugation
  • Idiomatic expressions
  • Cognates
  • Immersion
  • Fluency
  • Pedagogy
  • Linguistic competence
  • Mnemonics
  • Language acquisition
  • Pronunciation drills
  • Conversation partners
  • Language barrier
  • Bilingualism
  • Multilingualism
  • Accent reduction
  • Comprehension
  • Language proficiency
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