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Write about the following topic. Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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In
this
 modern era, becoming a known personality is very easy, but it is very difficult to hide day to day activities of private
life
. Sometimes,
media
 can help you
reaching
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reach
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 heights or even ruin
the
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apply
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life
 by showing wrong things. The two sides of the essay will be thoroughly analyzed and discussed in the below paragraphs before drawing a reasoned conclusion. Nowadays, the personal
life
 of the known personality
are
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is
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 not private anymore because of the numerous
media
 platforms and social
media
 applications. Once a person becomes a known personality,
people
 would like to get updates of their daily activities, due to which their private
life
 is not hidden any more.
For example
, if
any
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an
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 actor or actress is dating someone, Even Though if they want to keep it a secret they cannot hide it from the public because of the
media
 as they try to get
the
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a
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 glimpse of them just to improve their television ratings.
On the other hand
, once a person gets some fame
people
try
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 to follow their kind of lifestyle and they watch those personalities very closely which in turn results in the intervention of their personal
life
.
For instance
, if an actor/actress
are
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is
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 doing any commercials of tobacco,
people
 think that they use it in their daily
life
 and they start going on
same
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the same
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 path. To summarize, the two sides of the essay
media
people
 should start giving some privacy to those personalities to whom
people
 try to follow.
Therefore
, in my opinion, there is nothing wrong to be famous, but
people
 and
media
 should
also
 understand and respect the private
life
’s
of
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them and they should not make
it
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them
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 public.
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