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In many workplaces online communication is now more common than face-to-face meetings. Do the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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The growth of technology has led to a fundamental shift in the way companies hold meetings or conferences through face-to-face online
communication
 like email, instant messaging. And social media. While
this
 trend has led to
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 increase in time and interpersonal
communication
, it can
also
 cause misinterpretation and security theft. Today, the number of people working remotely at least part-time has Risenbecause many companies have multiple offices. Technologies like Skype, Slack and other popular platforms help keep the team connected. Online
communication
 can contribute to work workers tech talk things out across the globe through a video call.
This
 trend is not only incredible but decreases the chances of miscommunication that could become costly in terms of money and time.
However
,
communication
 online means you will often share
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confidential information
of
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 the company. Hackers are becoming increasingly sophisticated in cleaning all those secret stuff. To prevent
this
 to happen, employees must be aware of what to share or not in order to preserve the security of the organisations.
Moreover
 in personal
communication
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 several elements come into play to promote effective
communication
, including non-verbal signals tone in the voice.
For
example
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 if the boss
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 something graph tone you will generally understand he or she is angry. But in online
communication
, you will not have that luxury which is the cons of
this
 trend In conclusion, the online holding of meetings or conferences can be
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 useful for those who attend to work at home or are away from their office location.
This
 could be effective as long as it is used in a controllable and understandable way.
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