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Some people from poor and rural backgrounds find it difficult to get a university education. Universities should make it easier for such groups to enroll. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People
 who belong to the less privileged society and from the countryside, struggle to get the opportunity of higher study. As prerequisites universities sometimes tie the candidates with financial and social hurdles. I absolutely believe that
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 to create an educated nation these flat races need to loosen up and students from every corner of the world should get the chance to educate themselves.
First
 of all,
people
 who are lacking the financial ability to bear the cost of higher
education
 are being left aside for many years in many countries. Managing scholarship sometimes gets really tough that
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 candidates lose their hope to continue studying.
Moreover
, the number of available scholarship number or fund amount is very scarce that, it seems always very little compared to the number of potential candidates. To add up with it, many local educational institutions’
education
 standard is not up to the mark which
also
 pushes them on the lower part of the merit list.
Secondly
,
people
 from remote areas always suffer from a lack of information and technological support. Sometimes notices conveyed by the universities reach them really late that they cannot meet up with the requirements timely. Communication is another hindrance for them to come across.
For instance
, rural
people
 often become interested in female
education
 due to social insecurity and communication problem. In conclusion, according to my perspective, irrespective of social class, backgrounds and financial strength
education
 must be available for all. To ensure an educated nation, universities, as well as government, should reform laws to get the whole world under one umbrella and treat them equally.
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