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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

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One of the factors that have emerged with the development of tourism is
the
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frequent
airplane
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 flights. Air travel has a very negative impact on the environment and our nature. I believe that humanity and government together can solve
this
problem
. The solution to
this
problem
 may be an increase in the
prices
 of
airplanes
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.
Firstly
, if
people
 understand that regular use of
airplanes
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 is not profitable financially, they will begin to look for other types of
transport
 for short-distance travel.
Secondly
,
in addition
 to increasing
prices
 for air travel, you can
also
 lower
prices
 for road
transport
. Which may
also
 be an effective way. It will certainly be uncomfortable for humanity
,
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 because planes save time and are more comfortable, but not everyone will use them regularly if their
prices
 are high. The development of other methods of
transport
 is one of the methods for solving
this
problem
. Trams and subways are developing rapidly in many countries.
In addition
,
people
 are building underwater metro systems,
thus
people
 will be able to move by terrestrial
transport
 even through the seas and lakes.
However
, the construction of
such
 a
transport
 requires a large amount of finance from the government. In brief,
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transport
 of
people
 is harmful to the environment.
However
, if certain steps are strictly taken to solve
this
problem
,
then
 the level of consumption of
this
 mode of
transport
 can be reduced.
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