Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who could only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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on daily need products and on the situations which affect them must be taken by children.It is because they will learn numerous lessons after taking unsuitable choices decisions.

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are very curious

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shopping or buying video games etc,but numerous

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do not prefer

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due to the lack of knowledge.If the

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buy the products by themselves

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they can gain vast skills about things rather than receiving gadgets at home by their Father or Mother.

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to went with my father for buying clothes and I did not know the quality of garments ,

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,since I started buying my trousers and shirts,I gained the skill that which product clothes are cheap and of brilliant quality.

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,I suggest the clothing idea to my friends and

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do not make me selfish.

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to know the difference between good and bad after experiencing and what if the small

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choose their career or live daily

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in their own ways.

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,some masses study their

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in their own ways and no doubt they know much about

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rather than their juveniles.

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, the children go on the path where his or her

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go but the

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don't go through any struggle.They do every task while living in the comfort zones which is not profitable for their upcoming

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,I came to Canada with my own

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even my

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but I am living my life happily and my

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here is much good than

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. To conclude with,it is clear that juveniles should take each

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decision

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or buying products by

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themselves

because they will not depend on others after making their own choices.

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, they can ask their

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or important life

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from their mother or father.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Autonomy
Consequence-awareness
Self-centered
Informal decision-making education
Child development
Age-appropriate choices
Cognitive growth
Fostering independence
Parental guidance
Societal norms
Interpersonal consideration
Balance of freedom
Individualism versus collectivism
Experience-based learning

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