Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who could only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In
present
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scenario,
pupils
choice
on daily need products and on the situations which affect them must be taken by children.It is because they will learn numerous lessons after taking unsuitable choices decisions.
This
essay will explain both ideas and their effects in the upcoming paragraphs. To contempt with, young one's in
these era
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are very curious
for
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shopping or buying video games etc,but numerous
parents
do not prefer
this
due to the lack of knowledge.If the
pupils
buy the products by themselves
then
they can gain vast skills about things rather than receiving gadgets at home by their Father or Mother.
For instance
,in my
childhood
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I
use
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to went with my father for buying clothes and I did not know the quality of garments ,
however
,since I started buying my trousers and shirts,I gained the skill that which product clothes are cheap and of brilliant quality.
Moreover
,I suggest the clothing idea to my friends and
this
choice
do not make me selfish.
Secondly
,we know that each one
get
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to know the difference between good and bad after experiencing and what if the small
one's
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one
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choose their career or live daily
life style
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in their own ways.
Further more
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,some masses study their
pupils
in their own ways and no doubt they know much about
future
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rather than their juveniles.
In contrast
, the children go on the path where his or her
parents
tell
to
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go but the
pupils
don't go through any struggle.They do every task while living in the comfort zones which is not profitable for their upcoming
future
.
For example
,I came to Canada with my own
choice
even my
parents
were disagreed
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on
this
but I am living my life happily and my
future
here is much good than
India
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. To conclude with,it is clear that juveniles should take each
decisson
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decision
whether it is on
future
or buying products by
theirselve
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themselves
because they will not depend on others after making their own choices.
However
, they can ask their
parents
before taking any
study related
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or important life
choice
from their mother or father.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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