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in many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single sex schools or co-educational schools. some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, many young people are sent to
schools
 with different
gender
 type.
Although
 single-
sexsex
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sex sex
 education system could bring some advantages, personally, I believe that dier consequences could be provided for childrens' future by
this
way
 and we must send them to co-educational places for learning. Many parents, more in religious families, are worried about the friends
with
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opposite
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gender
 that their
children
 choose in their school ages, which lead them to send their
children
 to same-
sexsex
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sex sex
schools
. most of them believe that
,
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 these
schools
 are the best
way
 to preventing some
sex
 dangers
such
 as having
sex
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 early age. as result, they struggle with these problems in less time compared with other types of
schools
. But Is it the right
way
? In my opinion, learn and practice with different
sex
 have more efficient and it can bring a wide range of benefit.
Firstly
, their
children
 grow up more sociable. play and study with different
sex
 partner
is
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 most important things which youngers must deal with that at an early age. if we keep them away from each other, making connection and relationship will be so hard for them in future. So they must learn about how to communicate with different
gender
 when they are young.
Secondly
, these
gender
 differences
helps
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 them to have more fun in their
schools
. some activities need both boys and girls to play. In general, many parents will be struggling with dire consequences of
children
's future, if they send them into single-
sex
schools
. the best
way
 to preventing some dangers is to control
children
 indirectly and led them to learn and play in places with
different
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gender
.
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