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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no special knowledge of the following topic: News editors decide what to broadcast on television and what to print in newspapers. What factors do you think influence these decisions? Do we become used to bad news? Would it be better if more good news was reported? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

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 has become a global village in
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 century.
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 spread like
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 speed of light from one country to another. Due to keen interest in enhancing viewership tally and publishing of those
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 chunks that are less highlighted, it has become quite evident that
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 editors opt for
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that information
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information
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 seem adequate.
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result
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, often bad
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become
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 part of our
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 stories, which indeed makes us accustomed to it.
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, gaining viewers directly affects the options available to any
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 channel. As
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 of
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channels
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 rely on the number of views, certainly every
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 tries to come forward with those bits of
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 that guarantee them
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maximum viewership.
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, many
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 are now content creating
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 dramas that suits the genre of
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 customers so that they remain intact with their
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.
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,
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 outlets try to edge their rivals by proceeding forward with
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that is
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 unique in its nature. By producing
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, it allows
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 maximum views,
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 enabling them to carry forward with
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 of selective content of their choice.
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the ARY
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news
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 channel started airing Turkish drama, which due to its unique content has surged
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 customer base. More importantly, as selective
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 is played on Tv
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 and newspapers, often we come across
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a negative
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 chunk of
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information
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. Though
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such
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information
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 does make rounds in
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 circles, the impact
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it remains dominant on
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society.
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, rape cases being reported in Kasur put a mark on people's thought. Resultantly,whenever any
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 is heard from that region, people definitely get a negative vibe of it. In conclusion, it is quite apparent that television
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 and other
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 outlets do opt for contents that interest them.
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, in order to put a better image of a country through
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 platforms, it is considered beneficial to report positive
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 rather than
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bad news
a piece of bad news
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news
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