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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibilities for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Due to globalization, many
countries
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 are joining their hands with other
countries
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 to create win-win opportunities. The important factors for
developments
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the developments
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 of poorer
countries
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 are enhancement in the area of health, education and trade.
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, the law of other richer society should accept more responsibility to help the poorer
countries
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 in those
areas
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.
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, in my opinion,
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 should not be at the expense of developments of their own
countries
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. It is inevitable fact that developed
countries
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 spend millions of dollars
for
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on
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 research in different
areas
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.
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,
this
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 money can
be spend
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for
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on
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development
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the development
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 of
under developed
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underdeveloped
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 and developing
countries
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. The governments of richer
countries
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 can help poorer
nations
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 in the
areas
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 of health, education, trade etc. by providing aid for different purposes. They can enhance public health by providing advance medical facilities.
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, they should always embrace students in their
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 by providing them
higher
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with higher
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 education and liberalizing
visa
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the visa
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 process.
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 would help their own
countries
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 as well. It may bring cultural diversity and a sense of tolerance among the people of their own
countries
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.
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, the US government provides
funds
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 for aids patients in Uganda which is really helpful for
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apply
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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 country like Uganda.
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, richer
countries
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 should not provide
funds
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 at the expense of
development
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the development
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 of their own
nations
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. The governments should appropriately estimate
budget
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the budget
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 required for their own
countries
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 and
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after
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only excess
funds
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 can be allocated for helping the poorer
nations
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. In conclusion, the governments of richer
nations
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 should help poorer
nations
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 for development and improvement in different
areas
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 provided that they have excess
funds
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 and resources available to them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Developmental aid
  • Global solidarity
  • Economic disparity
  • International cooperation
  • Sustainable development
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Governmental intervention
  • Humanitarian assistance
  • Foreign aid dependency
  • Institutional support
  • Global economy
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Neocolonialism
  • Bilateral agreements
  • Multilateral organizations
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