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Even when poor countries get help from rich countries, hunger is Steel an issue. Discuss the problem, cause, and solutions. Support your answer with specific reasons and example

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Developed countries help undeveloped nations by all means
such
 as in minimizing the poverty rate but still they have to sleep without eating.
This
 essay will explicate the main reasons behind starving and solutions for the same. To commence with, the
first
 and foremost reason is corruption. To explicate, mostly the poor regions do not have a good administrative system to run the country smoothly and people who are in that field are just corrupt. They only care about their families not about the families who sleep hungry every day, nobody helps them and lose their lives struggling with poverty.
For example
, India is still under development and there are millions of people who sleep on roads and cannot even afford food.
Moreover
, another predominant reason behind
is
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bad
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the bad
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 tax structure. The government did not make any strict rule for individuals to pay tax. So, if some poor countries, population who has billions of dollars in their pockets, are not paying taxes. If someone
contribute
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, workers under the government keep it to themselves and
person
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the person
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 who paid it cannot even take benefit
of
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from
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 it.
Furthermore
,
last
 but not least reason is unfortunate education organizations,
authoriti
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authority
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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