Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

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children
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of the nation . though, some people opine that guardian should learn about
parential
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parental
potential
skills so that
this
course would
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them in better bringing up of the
kids
. I totally disagree with
this
statement as
parents
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society as well as they could learn by spending
time
with their toddlers.
To begin
with, it is undeniable fact that
parents
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role in the bringing up of the
children
, which has been successful from ancient times.
parents
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with the success and failure with the
children
. To explain it
further
,
parents
learn
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way of bringing up of their
children
by their own childhood experiences, with the help of their family member and from their
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neighbours
rather than getting enrolled into the course.
For instance
, in India people never go the classes for learning how to raise their
kids
,
instead
of joining programs they spend
time
with their elder ones and gain knowledge about it and prepare themselves for
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.
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Moving further
, practical knowledge is considered best as compare to
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theoretical
. In
modren
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modern
more
world where life becomes so rigorous because of shortage of
time
and people could hardly find
time
to spend it with their family like past
genrations
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generations
. Getting admission in
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the curriculum
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only
theortical
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theoretical
knowledge , whereas, by spending ample
of
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springtime with
kids
, many
parents
could get better exposure to the
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situation. In past times , many
parents
had more than 10
children
and they brought up them very efficiently and without any external support in
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. While mingling with their
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parents
come
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close to them and that
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a strong bond between them which helps in enhancing their skills. To conclude , in my
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perspective
, it is
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wastage of
time
in taking classes to learn
parental
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the parental
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skill as it can be learned by
help
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the help
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of grandparents and from
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society
.
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