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Caring for children is probably the most important job in any society. Because of this, all mothers and fathers should be required to take a course that prepares them to be good parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?

#children #job #society #mothers #fathers #course #parents
It is irrefutable that
children
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 of the nation . though, some people opine that guardian should learn about
parential
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parental
potential
 skills so that
this
 course would
helps
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 them in better bringing up of the
kids
. I totally disagree with
this
 statement as
parents
 can learn from
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society as well as they could learn by spending
time
 with their toddlers.
To begin
 with, it is undeniable fact that
parents
 play
significant
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 role in the bringing up of the
children
, which has been successful from ancient times.
parents
 skills can be learned by themselves
by
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with the success and failure with the
children
 . To explain it
further
,
parents
 learn
better
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 way of bringing up of their
children
 by their own childhood experiences, with the help of their family member and from their
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neighbours
 rather than getting enrolled into the course.
For instance
, in India people never go the classes for learning how to raise their
kids
 ,
instead
 of joining programs they spend
time
 with their elder ones and gain knowledge about it and prepare themselves for
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.
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Moving further
, practical knowledge is considered best as compare to
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theoretical
. In
modren
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modern
more
 world where life becomes so rigorous because of shortage of
time
 and people could hardly find
time
 to spend it with their family like past
genrations
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generations
 . Getting admission in
curriculum
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the curriculum
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provide
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 only
theortical
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theoretical
 knowledge , whereas, by spending ample
of
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springtime with
kids
 , many
parents
 could get better exposure to the
real life
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 situation. In past times , many
parents
 had more than 10
children
 and they brought up them very efficiently and without any external support in
trainings
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. While mingling with their
kids
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parents
 come
to
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too
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 close to them and that
create
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 a strong bond between them which helps in enhancing their skills. To conclude , in my
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perspective
 , it is
totally
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 wastage of
time
 in taking classes to learn
parental
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the parental
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 skill as it can be learned by
help
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the help
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 of grandparents and from
soceity
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society
.
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