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Due to low-cost flights, many people are choosing to holiday abroad rather than have holidays in their own country. What are the advantages and disadvantages to this?

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Flight journey, which was a luxury one, has become an affordable commodity, at least to most the middle classed
people
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, due to which many are opting to spend a vacation in foreign countries rather than their own. I shall examine both pros and cons shades of
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 in the following paragraphs. Their two main advantages of foreign tours,
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,The lower middle-
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 get a chance to visit the different counties and explore the new places and get tasted of variety of food like Mexican, Italien, so on.
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, most
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 can learn new things about life while travelling.
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 the lower class
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 can not effort
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business-class tickets.Due to prices changes in the flight journey.
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,the normal
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 got an option to travel in business class along with
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 community.
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, there are
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 some disadvantages which we must not ignore,
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 one is, with
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 who are looking for more holidays in aboard, the local travel business is decreasing.And the other is, due to
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 frequency of flights between the countries , the possibility of causing air pollution is
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 at risk.
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, it affects our global environment, especially on the ozone layer; not now in the forthcoming days. In conclusion,travelling to other countries cost came down to the lower-middle-class family, they can explore the new things.Causing the damage to the environment with high travelling it got efforted on our
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • stimulate the economy
  • revenue
  • cultural exchange
  • global understanding
  • carbon emissions
  • environmental impact
  • local businesses
  • employment opportunities
  • personal enrichment
  • broaden perspectives
  • over-tourism
  • depletion of local resources
  • quality of life
  • democratizing travel
  • cultural dilution
  • influx
  • patronage
  • domestic tourist destinations
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