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Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is it appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Approval of the medicines for human use is it
tedious
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 process which involves a series of
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 often performed on
animals
. While some
people
 support
this
 idea because it makes drugs safer for human consumption, others believe that it is an unethical practice. Personally, I am in favour of the idea that medicines should be tested in all possible Sena release before being released to the public. Ins animal experimentation
argue
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 that
animals
 have the same rights as human beings because they are the outcome of the same evaluation evolution process through which humans came into existence. Infecting them with viruses and exposing
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 to the bacteria, to create a conducive environment to
test
 a chemical substance may cause excuse eating pain to
this
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 land
animals
. Any failed
test
 can mean that the subject either loses
its
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 precious
life
 or suffer for the rest of his existence, and understandably some
people
 are against what they consider
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and
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 immoral practice. Meant less, if a drug is released into the market without a thorough
into
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interesting
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, I could
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 damage to anyone who may consume it. Every day a large number of
animals
 are being mercilessly killed by humans for their flesh and skin. There isn't a big difference between killing an animal for food and sacrificing its
life
 for testing a chemical composition, because both actions are helping the human race to survive. What's more, the
life
 of an animal used to
test
a
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life saving
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 drugs would help many
people
 die.
This
 is why a large number of
people
 believe that testing drugs on
animals
 is a matter of survival. To sum up, there are valid reasons why animal testing seems cruel and unacceptable to some, and crucial to others. In my opinion, even though
animals
 subjected to testing me suffer,
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it is
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 to ensure the healing power of a true.
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