Many people support use of animals for testing medicines for humans. Others believe it is it appropriate to use animals for such experiments. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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process which involves a series of
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often performed on
animals
. While some
people
support
this
idea because it makes drugs safer for human consumption, others believe that it is an unethical practice. Personally, I am in favour of the idea that medicines should be tested in all possible Sena release before being released to the public. Ins animal experimentation
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that
animals
have the same rights as human beings because they are the outcome of the same evaluation evolution process through which humans came into existence. Infecting them with viruses and exposing
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to the bacteria, to create a conducive environment to
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a chemical substance may cause excuse eating pain to
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land
animals
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test
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precious
life
or suffer for the rest of his existence, and understandably some
people
are against what they consider
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immoral practice. Meant less, if a drug is released into the market without a thorough
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, I could
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damage to anyone who may consume it. Every day a large number of
animals
are being mercilessly killed by humans for their flesh and skin. There isn't a big difference between killing an animal for food and sacrificing its
life
for testing a chemical composition, because both actions are helping the human race to survive. What's more, the
life
of an animal used to
test
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life saving
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drugs would help many
people
die.
This
is why a large number of
people
believe that testing drugs on
animals
is a matter of survival. To sum up, there are valid reasons why animal testing seems cruel and unacceptable to some, and crucial to others. In my opinion, even though
animals
subjected to testing me suffer,
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it is
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to ensure the healing power of a true.
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