Some people believe famous people's support towards international aid organizations draws attention to problems, while others think celebrities make the problems less important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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recent years, there has became more disputes regarding
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effects on problems addressing through international aid organizations. Some
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that famous stars tend to lose importance about the issues, while others opposite the
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. In my opinion, it is limited effectiveness that celebrities draw attention to the problems. In
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statements have mentioned above.
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it is not all famous
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attention to problems, there is a successful example
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as Bill Gates. He is devoting many environmental fields that close to our real life.
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, he has his own
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and website to talk about climate changes, education, poverty
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that need supports.
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the public attention to raise awareness of protecting our earth and supporting poor countries.
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huge potential
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behind famous
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is to say, as we know topics should spread to a broad range as much as they can. To find a popular star represent that would be
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access to approach the public easily.
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focus on those popular stars, not problematic its self. To be specific,
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organization try to highlight the topic
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as the life of
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animal or poverty children, but
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interested on who involved in these projects.
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, it is claimed that to help corporations should avoid contracting with stars because paying or contrasting are more likely business deal which can easy to lose the importance on the case its self. In conclusion, as mentioned above,
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having some positive effects, it is more
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, each organization should act wisely before
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those famous celebrities.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • endorse
  • international aid organizations
  • public awareness
  • amplify
  • advocacy
  • systemic change
  • oversimplification
  • trivialization
  • undermining
  • severity
  • misinformed advocacy
  • distorts
  • hamper
  • guided by experts
  • constructive
  • strategically
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