art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of all societies. Do you think art and music still have a place in today's modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?

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is the key factor In all communities. In

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modern era,

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is blooming each and every sector. Irrefutably

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and dance are still

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in nowadays. In my opinion about

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children should spend learn

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at their primary level education. Because

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exposed

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traditions, values.

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nowadays. Even though, we could respect our old culture as well as tradition

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. Many city side government is conducted to the

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exhibitions still now.

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we can save and protect our orthodox values.

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country has different kinds of traditional dance and

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it depends on each state heritage. After

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of

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these traditional culture

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was destroyed slow -by -slow. Even though we are still protected

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traditions.

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public

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addicted to

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western culture but western people are would like to learn our traditions.

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, children should learn these kinds of skills at

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. Because if they will be successful artist, they should practice since childhood period.

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, most famous celebrities were learning these skills since their young age. To conclude,

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pride for every

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. No one will destroy even

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. Parents must allow to their children learn

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and

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will change

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syllabus.

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means they will give extra attention to

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