art and music are considered some of the fundamental elements of all societies. Do you think art and music still have a place in today's modern world of technology? Should children spend more time learning art and music at school?
Some people believe that
,
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art
and music
is the key factor In all communities. In this
modern era, technology
is blooming each and every sector. Irrefutably art
and dance are still alived
in nowadays. In my opinion about Correct your spelling
alive
lived
this
children should spend learn art
and music
at their primary level education. Because art
and music
is
exposed Change the verb form
are
our
traditions, values.
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to our
To begin
with, people are addicted to technology
in
nowadays. Even though, we could respect our old culture as well as tradition Change preposition
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such
as art
and music
. Many city side government is conducted to the art
exhibitions still now. As a
result
we can save and protect our orthodox values. Add a comma
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For example
, the india
country has different kinds of traditional dance and Change the capitalization
India
music
it depends on each state heritage. After invention
of Add an article
the invention
technology
these traditional culture
was destroyed slow -by -slow. Even though we are still protected Change the determiner
this traditional culture
these traditional cultures
our
traditions. Change preposition
by our
Moreover
, most
public Add an article
the most
are
addicted to Change the verb form
is
the
western culture but western people are would like to learn our traditions.
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However
, children should learn these kinds of skills at school
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schools
such
as art
and music
. Because if they will be successful artist, they should practice since childhood period. For instance
, most famous celebrities were learning these skills since their young age.
To conclude, art
and music
is the
pride for every Correct article usage
apply
nations
. No one will destroy even Change to a singular noun
nation
technology
. Parents must allow to their children learn art
and music
and also
encourage too
. The education department Correct pronoun usage
them too
also
will change their
syllabus. Correct pronoun usage
its
This
means they will give extra attention to art
and music
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