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As a result of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is a growing demand for more flights. What problems does this have on the environment? What measures could be taken to solve the problems?

#tourism #people #demand #flights #environment #measures
In
the
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recent years, due to
the
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rapid globalization, travelling by plane has been flourishing at a high pace. Most people prefer aeroplanes for their convenience and affordable price.
However
, exponential demands for flights have resulted in environmental issues of
air
pollution
 and global warming, and creating bigger taxes and raising the ticket price seems like the only preferable solutions for
this
 problem. Without a shadow of a doubt, flying by jet is one of the biggest contributing factors for
air
pollution
, compared to other transport means. The impurity of
air
 is being mainly done by planes that produce toxic fumes.
This
also
 creates acid rains, which change the structure of the soil and affect the organisms living there negatively.
In addition
, depletion of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer is
also
 inevitable. Without
a
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proper protection of
ozone
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the ozone
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 layer, ultraviolet sun lights might easily raise the Earth`s temperature and fasten the process of global warming. Humanity seems to be in a dangerous state and taking actions against
this
 issue is very crucial. Despite the problems mentioned above, there are some solutions we could
endeavor
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 to undertake.
First
 of all, authorities need to increase the tax
of
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aerocompanies
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aero companies
, where a certain percentage of
company`s
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 profit will be stored for the issue of
pollution
.
Furthermore
, if these companies would increase the price for their tickets, more people would consider other types of more eco-friendly vehicles like trains. To conclude, the arising problem of people using too much jet for travelling
,
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 has been affecting the
air
pollution
 and earth`s temperature negatively. To resolve
this
, I recommend that the government will be more demanding about tax prices for
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 and raise the cost of plane tickets.
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