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The growth of multinational companies and the resulting rise of globalization creates positive effects for all. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that
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 of increasing multinational companies is globalization which
provide
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 tremendous opportunities for all the nations around the world. I partially agree with
this
 statement as an international corporation produce employment as well as boost the economy ,
however
 , globalization
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 the local business along with overuse of the resources. To commence with, multinational enterprises have numerous
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benefits.
Firstly
 , it provides high quality of goods to
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most
of
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people which upgrade the flow of currency that will boost the economy of the country.
Moreover
 , these organisations give
employement
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employment
 facilities to the natives that enhance the cost and standard of livings of the citizens .
Hence
 , people can able to serve the nation in many indirectly way
such
 as , by paying taxes .
For instance
 , if any company want to start up
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a business
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then
 it is necessary to invest in
infrastructer
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infrastructure
 and in manpower ,
consequently
 , it will help
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the masses
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 to find
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work within the local area .
Thus
 , people can become more independent and can
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 their decisions.
on the contrary
 side,
evry
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every
 coins
has
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 two sides . To elaborate
this
 , these associations overuse the natural resources of
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home country at
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a very
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 large scale and avoid the output because they do not five importance to
environmentals
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environmental
 effects. Apart from that ,
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 growth of international crew offer
varity
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variety
 of products which attracts the consumers , it might result in close down of some
decades old
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 business ,
furthermore
, a situation of
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monopoly
 has
been risen
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. To illustrate it , human
have
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increase
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 the quality of lives so they prefer to purchase expensive products that decrease the demand
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for
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 local
manfacturing
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manufacturing
. To conclude , everything has pros and cons so the multicultural
buisness
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business
 and globalization
also
 have. it
provide
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 a range of benefits but
also
 have some negative impact on the country .
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