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The money spent on space research has brought enormous benefits to mankind. But it could be more usefully applied. How far do you agree?

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It is true that humans have greatly benefited from funds used on
space
 research, even though other important alternatives ought to have been taken into consideration. I completely agree that
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 monies could have been strictly utilized on public
services
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 the
space
 sciences. There are various reasons why investing in the work of astronauts need to be reconsidered.
Firstly
, pace launching is extremely expensive.
This
 involves the high costs associated with training scientists and other workers as well as the acquisition of necessary equipment. It can be argued that
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 humans are able to study the galaxy through
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space
 missions.
However
,
this
 is only applicable to people who reside in more
industralised
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industrialised
 regions.
On the other hand
, the less privileged are most often not beneficiaries
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 these discoveries, which I believe is not worth the budget on
such
 programs. I believe that funding
space
 missions should be directed towards public
services
instead
. It is much cheaper to build schools, hospitals than it is to spend on
space
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 launch. The public
services
 come at a greater opportunity for all inhabitants in a particular area. To cite an example, students can find themselves in well-built schools to
further
 their education.
Additionally
, people who fall sick can seek health care from the health care delivery to improve their health. If funds are shifted to these
services
, the vast majority will have a better quality of life. In conclusion, I consider that money needs to be allocated to
services
 in the society that benefit all individuals as it is misplaced to have attention on
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 of
space
 projects.
Submitted by Gurwinder Singh on

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