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Nowadays, people care about their appearance more than before. Do you agree or disagree? Give your reasons.

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Generally,
people
 are more fashion- conscious these days. The
ever larger
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 number of beauty salons testifies
this
 statement. There are a large number of reasons behind
this
 attitude. The
first
 culprit is
media
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the media
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.
Media
 is responsible for
glorifyong
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glorifying
people
 like models and
flim
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film
 stars.
People
 are made to believe that everything they put on is necessary to keep
oneself
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themselves
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 up to date. To illustrate,
media
if
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is
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 flooded with advertisements
of
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for
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 beauty products,
jewelry
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jewellery
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, and clothes. Most of these products are aimed at females or children as it is believed that they are more vulnerable to
such
 influences.
Media
 gave birth to the dictum ' better be out of the world than out of fashion'. The propaganda they promote is that being modern and good-looking is as vital a food and shelter. Yet another reason for
this
 trend is the coming up of new professions like hospitality and management. It is a part of these professions to be good-looking and charming to attract
people
. There was a time when
people
 gave far less stress on appearance as their life was
labor-intensive
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 and as
media
 had far less influence on them.
However
, the nature of jobs has changed markedly. The modern glamorous professions require
attractive
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an attractive
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 personality, which includes linguistic skills and most importantly,
good
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a good
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 physical appearance. In total, it seems that being fashionable is an inescapable inevitability in these modern days and the reason behind
this
 change is that to survive in modern society,
people
 need it. As they say," while in Rome, do as Romans do".
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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