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The key solution for the environmental issues for the current generation to live a less comfortable life to benefit future generation.T what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Global warming and rise in
sea water
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 are the main problems of the countries.Some think that the best solution to the issues is that people living in
today
's world should sacrifice their comfort for the benefit of
young
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the young
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generation
 in the future. I clearly admit that
life style
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lifestyle
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changes
 are necessary but
this
 does not mean that
current
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the current
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generation
 has to sacrifice their comforts.The lifestyle
changes
 may be beneficial to
present
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the present
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generation
 as well as
future
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the future
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generation
. The lifestyle
changes
 may not be burdensome.
current
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The current
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generation
 should practice or follow the laws made by the local authorities.
For
example
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 government implement the banning of plastic.Many people
today
 have resorted to
use
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 paper bags or cloth bag
,
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 when they go to
supermarket
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the supermarket
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 and even shop owners are doing
this
 practice.
This
rules
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 has not
decrease
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 the quality of lifestyles of
current
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the current
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generation
 in any manner.Another guideline from
government
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the government
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 is planting trees .Many young
generation
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generations
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 of
today
 initiated the planting of trees in the roadsides or even in the mountains. Trees help
purifying
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to purify
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 the air, which is beneficial for the environment.It improves air quality and the current
generation
 can
breath
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breathe
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 fresh air.
Local
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The local
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 government has
also
 asked people to reduce the
use
 of energy
such
 as
practicing
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practising
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to
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apply
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turn off
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turn-off
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turn off
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 the lights when not in
use
 and unplug the sockets after
use
,
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 because some appliances are still consuming electricity even after
use
.
This
 can save us money as well.Having own car is a symbol of lifestyles but we should restrict it for
using
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use
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,
instead
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 we can
use
 public
transporation
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transportation
, by doing
this
 we help
environment
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the environment
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 emitting greenhouse gases into
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 which causes global warming. The current
generation
 can practice
this
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these
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 rules but it does not cause any discomfort in any manner. In my opinion, it is true that
today
's
generation
 has to make lifestyle
changes
 to lessen
environmental
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 problem,
however
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i
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I
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 truly disagree that these
changes
 would decrease the comfort level of the current
generation
. They are creating a better world for future
generation
 without making any compromise on their comfort.
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