Some people think that in this modern world people are getting dependent on each other, while others think that this world makes them more independent of each other. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
A few individuals are of
opinion
that in the modern Correct article usage
the opinion
era
people are not self-reliant, Add a comma
era,
while
others argue that, the technologically advanced world Linking Words
had
made them more self-sufficient. Wrong verb form
has
However
, I believe people have become more independent in the modern world. Linking Words
This
essay shall discuss both the views and support my opinion of persons becoming more independent in modern society. Linking Words
Firstly
, those who are in favour of modernisation making individuals more dependent on other humans may believe so because in order to combat the fast pace of contemporary life many of them do multiple jobs and Linking Words
hence
are unable to manage work-life balance. Linking Words
For example
- a working mother might need the help of a nanny or the support of a family member to take care of her children. Linking Words
Therefore
in present times, individuals may need each other to help balance their work and family life. Linking Words
On the other hand
, there are folk who think the modern era is sophisticated enough for them to be independent. Linking Words
For instance
- Linking Words
due to
technological advances Linking Words
work
from home is an option available for most employees, enabling them to be more independent of their co-workers. Wrong verb form
working
Hence
, many of them are able to manage their professional lives smoothly. Linking Words
Moreover
, online shopping has made it evident that to purchase something all you need is a digital store with digital products Linking Words
while
real stores and the persons needed to manage them are superfluous. So, store managers, Linking Words
salespeople
will be redundant soon in Correct word choice
and salespeople
this
kind of scenario. Linking Words
To conclude
, I am of the opinion that modern society has made many self-sufficient Linking Words
due to
technological advances around the globe, Linking Words
thus
making human beings in society efficient and enabling them to accomplish more on their own.Linking Words
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.
A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).
Stick to this essay structure:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion