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Some people believe they should keep all the money they have earned andshold not pay tax to the state. Do you agree and disagree?

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It is irrefutable fact that paying
taxes
if
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is
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important
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an important
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 part and duty of every native as
this
 help in the holistic development of
nation
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the nation
a nation
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.
However
, some individuals do not agree with
this
 notion and think that they should save that money in their own accounts.In my opinion, it is crucial to pay
taxes
 to the
governingh
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governing
authoirties
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authorities
.
This
 essay will
ellaborate
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elaborate
 the
reasions
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reasons
 of paying
taxes
. The
first
 and foremost reason
of
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for
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 paying
taxes
 is that it
help
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helps
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 in the economic growth of the
country
 and prevent fraud.When people file their
taxes
 they follow proper legal procedures and
prinicples
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principles
whichl
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which
 help the
goovernment
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government
 to trace the financial
acitivities
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activities
 going
in
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on in
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 the nation.
In addition
, it
also
 keeps the economy of circulation.
Moreover
, ut
also
 gives an idea to the
government
 which sector is having more profit and which is lacking behind so that later they can focus on that particular area.
Furthermore
, money collected
bystate
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by state
 from
public
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the public
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 is used for
welfare
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the welfare
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 of
public
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the public
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 only.
For instance
, regional authorities
reinburse
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reimburse
 those
taxes
 in providing better health care facilities,
eductaion
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education
 and improving transport infrastructure. It is
also
 considered
duty
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the duty
a duty
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 of citizens to help
government
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the government
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 in
growth
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the growth
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 and development
ofnation
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of nation
of nations
.As dwellers of
particular
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a particular
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region
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,region
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 we are using resources and facilities provided by the officials of
country
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the country
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.
Government
 always pay attention and tackle the problems faced by their population residing in their
country
.
Consequently
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,Consequently
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 the
moeny
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money
 given to
government
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the government
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 in form of
taxes
 will return to the
ppckets
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pockets
packets
 of
common
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the common
a common
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 man as a facility.
Additionally
, there are many natural calamities that cause destruction .So, money paid to the
goovernment
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government
 will help fellow citizens in times of crisis and help to resolve the problem. In conclusion, it can be seen
tha
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that
the
government
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the government
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 is having lots of
responsibilty
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responsibility
 and it
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would
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wold
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would
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 be wrong to put all the burdens on their shoulders only.So, individuals need to come together
with
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apply
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hand in hand for the progress of their own
country
.
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