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Some people believe that university should offer places for people with high marks, Others says that universities accept all age of people even if they do not well at schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #offer #places #marks #universities #age #schools
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It is irrefutable that competition in educational
institution
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 admission has increasing day by day.some argued that
academy
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 should welcome students with the only higher score ,wheres some believe that educational
institution
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 should give a chance to all age groups, not on based their high
university
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 grades.I personally believe that
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academy
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the academy
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 should select the candidate based on
thier
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their
the
intelligency
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intelligence
 and talent,age should not be a barrier for
further
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 review. Nowadays educational
institution
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are
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 not
compiting
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competing
 with
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university
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the university
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 in a town or a country but,they are linked with
global
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the global
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 village.The reputation of the educational
institution
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also
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depend
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 on the
students
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student's
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 performance which
motivate
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motivates
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 academic staff to
enroll
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enrol
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 a student with good marks
on
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in
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 high school.
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, the one who has
good
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a good
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 score in their secondary education would perform
a
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apply
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good in
university
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 as they have
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ability
abilty
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the abilty
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 to understand the importance of the
study
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.
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Moreover
,if
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encourage
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a
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indiviudal
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individual
 to
study
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 hard at schools to get
a
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addmition
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addition
admission
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reputed
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the reputed
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academy
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. on the other side,some people feel that
academy
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are
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 discriminating the student by their high school score.there are some
possiblity
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possibility
 that under some
circumentace
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circumstance
 one would not have
chance
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a chance
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 to perform well in
high
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the high
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 department.for ,example if someone facing a situation
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health
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a health
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 problem or unexpected death would give
effect
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 on their
study
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 which is lead to bad performance or may they need to leave their
study
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. In
coclusion
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conclusion
,
University
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give
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gives
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 a chance every candidate to prove themselves by entrance test.universities should not judge students by
thire
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their
 high school results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • meritocracy
  • academic excellence
  • rigors of university education
  • inclusive
  • lifelong learning
  • diversity
  • workforce skills
  • practical experience
  • enrich
  • holistic admissions approach
  • extracurricular activities
  • personal statements
  • well-rounded student selection
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