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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is argued by some that since the introduction of the
internet
, people
has
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 become closer to one another, whilst others think that it has turned us and our communities to be more isolated.
This
 essay believes that
although
 the
internet
 allows for more simple ways of communication, it has reduced the number of real interactions between individuals. The
internet
 offers several new ways of long-distance communication, which once was impossible.
This
 is simply because nowadays there is a large variety of social media platforms that enables people from different parts of the world to communicate with each other on a daily basis, without spending money or performing any special effort.
For example
, since my mother who lives in Europe started using an application called Skype, her relationships with my son, who currently lives in Israel, have improved significantly.
On the other hand
, the
internet
 has led to a reduction of
face
 to
face
 interactions,
thus
 causing certain individuals and
socities
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societies
 to become more isolated. The fact that the
internet
 had enabled people with
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entertaiment
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entertainment
, without the need of even leaving their sofa, has reduced the number of real social interactions.
For instance
, the number of community activities and social gathering in my town had dropped considerably since the introduction of the
internet
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that in spite
the
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 fact that the
internet
 allows for
simplier
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simpler
 long-distance relationships, its reduction of real
face
 to
face
 interaction had led us to be more isolated as a society as well as individuals.
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