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Some people think that the internet has brought people closer together while others think that people and communities are becoming more isolated. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

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It is argued by some that since the introduction of the
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, people
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 become closer to one another, whilst others think that it has turned us and our communities to be more isolated.
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 the
internet
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 allows for more simple ways of communication, it has reduced the number of real interactions between individuals. The
internet
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 offers several new ways of long-distance communication, which once was impossible.
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 is simply because nowadays there is a large variety of social media platforms that enables people from different parts of the world to communicate with each other on a daily basis, without spending money or performing any special effort.
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, since my mother who lives in Europe started using an application called Skype, her relationships with my son, who currently lives in Israel, have improved significantly.
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, the
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 has led to a reduction of
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 to
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 interactions,
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 causing certain individuals and
socities
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societies
 to become more isolated. The fact that the
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 had enabled people with
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entertaiment
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entertainment
, without the need of even leaving their sofa, has reduced the number of real social interactions.
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, the number of community activities and social gathering in my town had dropped considerably since the introduction of the
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. In conclusion, I strongly believe that in spite
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 fact that the
internet
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 allows for
simplier
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simpler
 long-distance relationships, its reduction of real
face
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 to
face
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 interaction had led us to be more isolated as a society as well as individuals.
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