Some people think that radio is the best way to get news while others think that television is better for this purpose. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are some ways of getting informed nowadays.
Radio
and
television
are devices that allow
people
to get news, each one has its own particularities and
people
has their preferences, considering advantages of them.
Radio
is
an old fashioned equipment
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old fashioned equipment
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that
people
used to listen to get news, games or chattering. to exemplify,
people
used to
listen
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by
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on
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radio
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the radio
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.
This
tool was invented a long time ago. Elderlies are more
accostumated
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acculturated
to it because when they were juvenals, they have only the
radio
to get
informations
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information
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. Nowadays, even with the invention of
television
, most of those
people
preferer
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radio
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the radio
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.
Although
radio
is lighter than
television
, it is only possible to listen to it and, as far as I gather,
this
is a crucial disadvantage.
Therefore
, most adolescents do not like it.
Television
is a younger invention that
people
used to have at home since it becomes more popular
,
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because when it was invented, it was quite expensive and
only
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an only
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wealthy individual could pay for it. Currently,
television
has improved its services and can improve its broadcasts conditions. It is possible to watch movies, TV shows, novels and a plethora of kinds of programs. The innovation of TV shows has turned it
the
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into the
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most popular device to get informed by adolescents and adults in the present.
Television
is immense and has the possibility to change channels faster and the visual effect is its most remarkable advantage. In conclusion, from my perspective, there those
people
who preferer the
radio
due to the fact that they growing with it, when it was invented.
On the other hand
, there is the individual who has
TV
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a TV
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as their favourite device to get news. Both alternatives are available nowadays, with their own characteristics.
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