Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
It is often argued that recreational
activities
are a better approach for maintaining public healths while others believe that other factors are also
needed to measure as sports plays a very less role to stay healthy. In my opinion, sports are important for stay healthy but other factors are also
considered.
Firstly
, This
is undoubtable
that sport participants have Correct your spelling
undoubtedly
healthy
body as sports Add an article
a healthy
activities
prevents
them from many Change the verb form
prevent
disease
like obesity, Change to a plural noun
diseases
diabeties
, high blood Correct your spelling
diabetes
presure
but Correct your spelling
pressure
also
help for their treatment. For illutrate
, In Correct your spelling
illustrate
recent
study the number of people who Add an article
a recent
regurlarly
participate in any kind of physical Correct your spelling
regularly
activities
like swimming , running have significantly lower body mass index values, lower blood pressures, and lower resting pulse rates. Moreover
, sportism
Correct your spelling
sports
also
help
to develop Change the verb form
helps
self esteem
and help to remove stress and anxiety.Researches found that participants found more Add a hyphen
self-esteem
relax
, calmer after physical Change the form of the verb
relaxing
active
rather than inactive. Along with that, Adventure programs teach the importance of trust, appropriate Replace the word
activity
risk taking
, supportive social interaction and personal challenge while creating valuable life long memories which helps for public mental peace and health.
On the Add a hyphen
risk-taking
Flip side
, Correct your spelling
Flipside
others
aspects Correct quantifier usage
other
are
Change the verb form
also need
also
need to take care as building new
hospital with all Add an article
a new
accomodations
and good medical staff are needed for public health. For illustrate, In Correct your spelling
accommodations
corona
Correct article usage
the corona
Correct your spelling
pandemic
pndemic
all world are facing shortages of bed in hospitals and oxygen supply which Add a comma
,pndemic
indanger
public life. so Correct your spelling
endanger
in danger
a proper medical facilities
should be developed for public safety in case of emergencies in any pandemic situation. Correct the article-noun agreement
proper medical facilities
a proper medical facility
Moreover
, Many
people are homeless and poor Correct your spelling
many
which
cannot afford food and medicine so a proper budget should be pass to provide Correct pronoun usage
who
them
Correct your spelling
the
basic
needs. Along with that , people who live leisure life should have Change preposition
with basic
healthy
diet along with physical Add an article
a healthy
activities
.
In conclusion, For Correct your spelling
public
puclic
Correct article usage
the puclic
heath
Correct your spelling
health
Correct your spelling
government
goveronment
should have to take Correct article usage
the goveronment
necessary
actions and Correct article usage
the necessary
proper
budget should Correct article usage
a proper
be maintain
between physical Change the verb form
be maintained
activities
and other aspects like medical services and social welfare campegion.Submitted by skshikhakochar on
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