Children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a fact that

children

are becoming overweight and unhealthy.In some countries,the number of

obesity

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children

is increasing dramatically

everyday

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.

For example

,approximately 21%-24% of

America

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children

and adolescents are overweight and another 16-18% is obese.Many people say that the

government

should have the

responbility

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responsibility

.In my opinion,

i

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completely agree with that idea.

This

essay will discuss the role of the

government

to minimize the number of

obesity

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obese

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children

.

Obesity

is a medical condition in which excess body fat has accumulated to an extent that it may have a negative effect on health.

Obesity

is caused by many reasons.

Firstly

,with the development of fast

food

,more people choose to eat them because of their convenience.

Secondly

,

children

do not do exercise and join outside activities,they just stay at home and watch electron devices.Redundant energy accumulated

under

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the form of grease causes

obesity

There are some reasons why the

government

has to take responsibility

in

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for

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reducing

obesity

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the obesity

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of

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in

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children

.

Firstly

,

children

are the

next

generation of the country in the future. If the country wants to develop the economy,culture or politic,young

genertation

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generation

must have

a

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good health,fitness so the

government

should have measures to deal with

problem

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the problem

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.

However

,

i

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think that

parents

should share the liability with

authorties

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authorities

because they are companions with their

children

. Solving these problems involves both

parents

and

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government

goverment

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.The

government

should propagandize

children

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to children

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that they should eat less fast

food

and junk

food

.

Moreover

,authorities should open general health check.

Parents

should keep an eye on

children

by cutting down

amount

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the amount

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of sugar,fat in their

food

.They should

encourge

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encourage

children

to join outside activities,do more

exercie

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exercise

exercises

to burn calories and

gease

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grease

ease

.

Inconclusion

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, the

government

have the

responbility

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responsibility

in curbing the

obesity

epidemic.

Besides

,

parents

should share the liability with the

goverment

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government

.We should encourage

children

to maintain healthy eating patterns that contain less fat and sugar