Children are becoming overweight and unhealthy. Some people think that the government should have the responsibility. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is a fact that

children

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are becoming overweight and unhealthy.In some countries,the number of

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obesity

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children

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is increasing dramatically

everyday

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.

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,approximately 21%-24% of

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children

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and adolescents are overweight and another 16-18% is obese.Many people say that the

government

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should have the

responbility

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responsibility

.In my opinion,

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completely agree with that idea.

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essay will discuss the role of the

government

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to minimize the number of

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obesity

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children

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.

Obesity

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is a medical condition in which excess body fat has accumulated to an extent that it may have a negative effect on health.

Obesity

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is caused by many reasons.

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,with the development of fast

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,more people choose to eat them because of their convenience.

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,

children

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do not do exercise and join outside activities,they just stay at home and watch electron devices.Redundant energy accumulated

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the form of grease causes

obesity

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There are some reasons why the

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has to take responsibility

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reducing

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obesity

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the obesity

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of

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children

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.

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,

children

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are the

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generation of the country in the future. If the country wants to develop the economy,culture or politic,young

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generation

must have

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good health,fitness so the

government

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should have measures to deal with

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the problem

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,

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think that

parents

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should share the liability with

authorties

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authorities

because they are companions with their

children

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. Solving these problems involves both

parents

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and

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government

goverment

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.The

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should propagandize

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children

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to children

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that they should eat less fast

food

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and junk

food

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.

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,authorities should open general health check.

Parents

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should keep an eye on

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by cutting down

amount

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the amount

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of sugar,fat in their

food

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.They should

encourge

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encourage

children

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to join outside activities,do more

exercie

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exercise

exercises

to burn calories and

gease

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grease

ease

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Inconclusion

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, the

government

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have the

responbility

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responsibility

in curbing the

obesity

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epidemic.

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,

parents

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should share the liability with the

goverment

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government

.We should encourage

children

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to maintain healthy eating patterns that contain less fat and sugar