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By punishing murderers with the death penalty, society is also guilt of committing murder. Therefore, life in prison is a better punishment for murderers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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saviour
punishment
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 is the best
sollution
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solution
 for deep
crime
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 to avoid illegal activity. When
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penalty
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the penalty
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 amount increase
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meanwhile
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dimish
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diminish
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 who murderer will get
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deadly
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penalty
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society
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 indirectly will do guilt
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 as murder.
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, some people think that incarceration is the best
penalty
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 for killing
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person
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a person
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instead
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death
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the death
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penalty
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. I strongly agree with
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 statement because if a
person
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 does kill the
other
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 man I do not think
society
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 will give the same
punishment
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such
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 as
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the deadly
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deadly
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death
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penalty
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 whether legal, illegal but the
penalty
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 look like the same rate.
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 with, irrefutably criminal always
dangeours
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dangerous
person
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 but the community is not like that .
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, prison is the best treatment for all wrong behaviour people. Because their
life time
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lifetime
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 fully
spend
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this
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 to they never touch with outside
society
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.
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 good
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 compare to
one day
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punishment
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.
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, captives can understand and realise their mistake when they
are being living
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are being lived
are living
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 inside the lockup.
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, the Gulf countries rules and regulation are very different compare to other parts of the world.
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crime
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punishment
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 is
most
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the most
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dangeroes
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dangerous
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infront
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in front
 of their civilians because other people should think before doing any illegal activity.
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,
community
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 and court are provided deep
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 for
serious
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the serious
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 killer while they can not realise their mistake which is the
crime
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 rate.
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, we should put into the youth recreation
center
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order
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 to they will know the value of life as well as a soul value.
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, nobody
have
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a
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the
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 rights to kill any
person
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 without our respectable god. whether an authority
person
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, an ordinary man.
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,
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western countries never give
deadly
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a deadly
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penalty
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for
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 culprit because they give lifetime
punishment
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 for their murderer
such
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 as
prison
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in prison
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. To conclude, undoubtedly captives should
punished
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punish
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 it depends on their
crime
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 rate basic. but murderer must get deep
penalty
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compare
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 to small
crime
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person
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. Even though
punishment
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 meaning is
next
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 time never do again and realise
to
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apply
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their mistake.
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addition
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,addition
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society
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 should provide another chance for
prisoner
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a prisoner
the prisoner
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 in
order
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 to they will be live a good human as well as obey the regulation and values.
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