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To succeed in a business, one needs to know maths. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#business #maths
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There are several debates about the factors that lead to a profitable enterprise. Some people claim that in order to achieve success in a
business
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,
one
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 has to have
math
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knowledge
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 on some level. I completely agree with
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 point of view.
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businesses
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 look simple from a customer's point of view, they require precise accounting, or else
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 would fail to profit and maintain their
business
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.
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, some efficient
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knowledge
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 makes
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 owners make better decisions. Of the applications of utilizing
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 in
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 industry,
one
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 can mention providing statistics, learning from them and predicting future scenarios, determining net profit for a certain amount of time, analyzing the
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's overall financial health, applying discounts and their effect on the revenue, etc. You
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 may need to consider if you can afford to expand your
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. So, basic
math
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knowledge
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 to understand these actions is of significant importance both for small
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 and large.
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, some entrepreneurs do not have
math
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knowledge
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, but they do have successful
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 due to employing accountants.
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 is a solution, there are demerits to it.
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, small
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 and home
businesses
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 are the results of
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 or two people's ideas and a very small amount of money, so they can't afford an accountant.
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, they need basic
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knowledge
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 to avoid loss.
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, in large companies, because the
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 doesn't belong to them, they may mistreat it and lack accountability, or even worse, they may turn out to be con men and cause bankruptcy. So, with
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knowledge
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, the CEO can check their employees' jobs and avoid loss. In conclusion, to make better
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 decisions and to check employees' jobs to avoid loss, I believe that
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 needs to have
math
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knowledge
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 to succeed in their
business
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.
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