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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance tech which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technology
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nowadays. A fair amount of people think that the
crime
 ratio is being reduced compare to
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days
 in order
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 we can take
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 action and cure
crime
 by modern technology. I strongly agree with
this
 statement and
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explain
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To begin
 with, nowadays people get more awareness about
crime
 and thief. All credit goes to technology undoubtedly. In the past
days
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 people had not used
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any innovative machines
camera
. We are very blessed to having tech because we are able to
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 our
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asset
assets
 and our life.
This
 can help to protect and solve many tackles to the
police
 department by CCTV footage-based. We can see that many cases are being solved by proper evidence.
For example
, many
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developed
 countries are being fixed
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CCTV
Cctv
camera
 on each and every place
such
 as road, street, public place and etc. in order to
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crime
 ratio is
dimish
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diminish
 compare to other parts.
Furthermore
, in
this
 modern era, forensic is the best way to find the culprit. Many cases will solve
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type
 of method even very dangerous and mistry case too. Those
days
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 not possible to find but today
this
 is more comfortable and convenient too.
Moreover
,
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the public
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also
 very well know how to react when any
crime
 happens while they will immediately call the
police
 and
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 a video about the incident and upload the social media.
Therefore
, many captives are being afraid to do any illegal activity because we can easily
findout
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find out
 the criminals
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 using technology.
For example
, all countries are
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provided
 which the
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 no when any emergency will happen instantly call the
police
 line with free and the
police
 will arrive within ten
minitues
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minutes
. To conclude, irrefutably,
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technology
 is the boon for
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every person. those
days
 person
are
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 unlucky.
This
 means they had not used advanced tech. before period ant
crime
 had happened while the
police
 department had put
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 of effort to find a wrong activity person but now it is not taking too much of period. In ,addition, all shops are set
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CCTV
Cctv
camera
 in order to avoid any misleading
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activities
 even though will happen any wrong behaviour they will check their
camera
 footage to find criminal easily.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • surveillance technology
  • CCTV cameras
  • facial recognition software
  • forensic science
  • DNA analysis
  • electronic databases
  • cybercrime monitoring
  • digital forensics
  • predictive policing
  • data analysis
  • artificial intelligence
  • community policing
  • public safety
  • crime prevention
  • crime solution
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